I DREAM
“Sharday”
“Sharday”
“Stop tapping me, what is it?”
“Are you still here – in this room – listening?”
“Where else would I be?” I protested
Tanya shrugged off the idea that I were elsewhere, with a quiet almost quite uncomfortable laughter.
Even though the utterance I uttered functioned as a rhetorical question, the implied answer couldn’t have been more far from the truth. While Tanya ranted on about her marital problems, going over the idea of whether her Husband required her to put the proposal of divorce on the table, I had watched the white walls of the room that had confined me collapse. I had watched my friend Tanya fade into the distance and her voice become nothing more than a tiny whisper.
I on the other hand took the opportunity to walk over the collapsed wall and enter into ‘wonderland’. The Amazon wasn’t as I had imagined it, it was much more. The trees functioned as a canopy that hovered over my head and the trees went on for as far as my eyes could see. I felt like a mouse in the midst of giants. There were different creatures that inhabited the land that sported an array of various colours. Blue, green, red and turquoise were just the colours found on one single creature.
I longed to behold, to come into contact with the indigenous people of the land, even if it was only one. And ohh I was not disappointed at all. Emerging from trees my eyes locked with a blue avatar. I saw her do that thing, you know what I’m talking about. The best way to describe it is when the hair like thing at the end of her hair became one with the hair like thing on the end of the flying creature. Before I knew it I was up in the air flying my own creature thing. It was stunning; it glistened in the sunlight and –
“So?”
“Huh” I say snapping out of my trance, disappointed by the rather plain mundane scenery I appeared to now find myself in.
“The divorce?”
“It’s all in our heads, just in our heads”
“You’re right, if he wanted a divorce he’d have said”
SHARDAY OTHERWORDLINESS
HOPE U ENJOYED IT
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Nice story - I can see you have a vivid imagination. My constructive criticism to you would be to proof read your work before posting and also to try to substitue some of your repeated words as it doesn't read well. Some of your sentences are a bit cumbersome as well.
ReplyDeleteGood effort though. I really liked the line: "I felt like a mouse in the midst of giants". Keep writing.
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Thank you. Yea I will definitely put ur commentz in2 practice!! Wit time I'll get betta :)
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